Clutter metaphor

Clutter cleaned up.

Here are two versions of one of my poems
(with a metaphor that hits you over the head with a hammer).

Raspberries metaphor

raspberries

The “raspberry collective” metaphor I used reminded me of the miniature world in Dr. Seuss’ Horton Hears a Who.

Crow simile

crow

His wings are as wide as the sky
They blacken the whole schoolyard …

Beast metaphor

Big Beige Monster of Second Rate

Have you ever had to fill out an official document that had to be mailed ON DEADLINE somewhere IMPORTANT that involved, say, MATH, which intimidated the stuffing out of you?